That was a very nice poem Tyrese. Where did you find such good language? The only thing is the last question. It doesn’t make sense. How can you change it so it improves?
Well done Tyrese,your writing was really emotional.I especially liked the structure how it started with He most of the time but mabe you could of added more rhyme into it.
Great poem Elizabeth! I love the way that you ended it by using the phrase ‘ I wait.’ It was very powerful. It reminded me of the poem ‘She Waits.’ Did you use any other ideas from different poems? To make it even better, you could structure your poem properly. You broke it up and it makes it sound funny when the reader reads it out aloud.
That was a very nice poem Tyrese. Where did you find such good language? The only thing is the last question. It doesn’t make sense. How can you change it so it improves?
Great poem William! I like the way that you used that repetitive language. Also great description. Who inspired you to use those techniques?
Great poem Kane! Your poem is really emotional. It made me feel like somebody had died that was maybe a lose friend.
Junayd I really liked the questions you asked in the poem. Where did you learn that skill? To improve, I think you should add more line breaks.
Well done Tyrese,your writing was really emotional.I especially liked the structure how it started with He most of the time but mabe you could of added more rhyme into it.
Great poem Elizabeth! I love the way that you ended it by using the phrase ‘ I wait.’ It was very powerful. It reminded me of the poem ‘She Waits.’ Did you use any other ideas from different poems? To make it even better, you could structure your poem properly. You broke it up and it makes it sound funny when the reader reads it out aloud.