Wow year 6 wolves! I really enjoyed reading your stories ! Especially the way you put tension in them! Well done Salma I am really proud of you ! Keep up the good work year 6 ! 🙂
Wow everyone!! You brought so much tension to your story I can’t wait to see what happens next!! When I read your story’s pictures were building up in my head. You guys should be proud of yourself. Keep on trying and you’ll get better and better.
Sophia your handwriting is great! 😀 Your work was interesting to read I really enjoyed it. I also loved your tense paragraph when the soldier was asking Rose where she was going!! well done Sophia keep the good work up!! 😀 🙂
Wow welle done Elsie! I really loved how you put the tension in them! I wish I could read on even more ! Your handwriting is also really good!! Keep up the good work! 🙂
What wonderful stories you all have written. I have really enjoyed reading the Big Write every week and look forward to reading your work each week. Keep up the great work everyone in Wolves.
I really enjoyed reading everyone’s stories – they were all very descriptive! Well done everyone!
Katie, the opening paragraph of your narrative is really detailed and captures how Rose is feeling about the children in the concentration camp and lets the reader understand how distracted she is. Good work!
Well done Emeka and Year 6 for creating tense stories. You have all proven that you are capable of writing a good piece of writing. Emeka you made it creepy with good description and made tension when Rose had a shadow under her door.
Emeka’s Mutti 🙂
Well done Wolves! You have all thought a lot about Rose and what she might write in her diary. Your writing is well planned and creates visual images in the reader’s mind. It makes your work interesting to read!
Wow Tia. That was very good but you’re missing out too many full stops and capital letters. You’re making me think twice about sending you to university!
Wow Emeka it was very clever of you to see some German word in your writing. Especially the words you have chosen weren’t too hard to understand. Your mutti must be very proud of you.
Wow Salma! Looks like you really paid attention to your work! Keep up the good work! Just make sure you read over your work and work on your tenses for example : First person,Second person and third person…. Well done keep up the amazing work! Well done once again Salma! I ‘m really proud of you ! 🙂
I liked your big write Nathan but try to make the story a bit more tense like a soldier spotting Rose Blanche then shouting at her for feeding the Jews.;)
I really like yours Leonor I really like that you ended your work in a cliff hanger it left me in suspense. I really wanted to know what happens next !! ( It would be helpful if I didn’t know:) )
Keir you have such brilliant piece of writing you have good use of ellipses, you just need to work on your speed you are rushing too much!!! Slow Down.
Salma, I really liked your work,there were some minor mistakes but I’m sure you are more than capable of looking over it and fixing them so your story is ready for everyone to read and enjoy.
Nathan used show not tell in your writing. You used very good description to make the me feel like I was there watching Rose Blanche help the Jews by taking her own food and giving it to them. 🙂
Nice choice of words Emeka. I really like the way you showed that Roses mum was angry instead of saying that she was angry. ‘Asher mum walked into the room she was startled by what she said.
Youness you created a very tense piece of writing.You done this by at the very end of you story a soldier was following Rose and by doing this it really makes the reader think that will Rose get caught.
J-Leigh your writing was very exciting. You made it quite tense throughout especially at the end when the Mayor was there. ‘Rose want to the gate to give them food. Suddenly the Mayor opened the door, Ruuun!’ 🙂
Emeka you were very creative with writing on how you used sarcasm in writing because people don’t usually do that and it is really good and now you have inspired me to try and use sarcasm in my own writing.
Well done everyone :D.
Mr French you put up my wrong work :[
Whoops. I will fix it when we are back at school! Sorry J-Leigh
Wow year 6 wolves! I really enjoyed reading your stories ! Especially the way you put tension in them! Well done Salma I am really proud of you ! Keep up the good work year 6 ! 🙂
I think Nathan should be Big Writer of the Week! He makes me visualise what’s happening in the story. Oh, I do miss you all! 🙁
Wow everyone!! You brought so much tension to your story I can’t wait to see what happens next!! When I read your story’s pictures were building up in my head. You guys should be proud of yourself. Keep on trying and you’ll get better and better.
I really liked yours Elsie it was so interesting I wanted to carry on your story. I also predicted what I thought would happen next.
Sorry, that was meant to say Elsiez not Nancy sorry.
I love yours Edward!!!!! 😀 🙂
I really loved your Elsie, i could see you put a lot of effort in!
Youssef I really liked the way you made it seem like Rose was really scared and about to have a heart attack when her mum came. 😀
To improve you could try and work on some of your spellings.
Sophia your handwriting is great! 😀 Your work was interesting to read I really enjoyed it. I also loved your tense paragraph when the soldier was asking Rose where she was going!! well done Sophia keep the good work up!! 😀 🙂
Nice Eddy!
well done Oliver.
Jonan your work got even more tense as it went along, it was brilliant. You are such a creative writer keep it up!!
Thanks Edward .
Wow welle done Elsie! I really loved how you put the tension in them! I wish I could read on even more ! Your handwriting is also really good!! Keep up the good work! 🙂
Well done*
What wonderful stories you all have written. I have really enjoyed reading the Big Write every week and look forward to reading your work each week. Keep up the great work everyone in Wolves.
I really enjoyed reading everyone’s stories – they were all very descriptive! Well done everyone!
Katie, the opening paragraph of your narrative is really detailed and captures how Rose is feeling about the children in the concentration camp and lets the reader understand how distracted she is. Good work!
Well done Emeka and Year 6 for creating tense stories. You have all proven that you are capable of writing a good piece of writing. Emeka you made it creepy with good description and made tension when Rose had a shadow under her door.
Emeka’s Mutti 🙂
Well done Wolves! You have all thought a lot about Rose and what she might write in her diary. Your writing is well planned and creates visual images in the reader’s mind. It makes your work interesting to read!
Wow Tia. That was very good but you’re missing out too many full stops and capital letters. You’re making me think twice about sending you to university!
Wow Emeka it was very clever of you to see some German word in your writing. Especially the words you have chosen weren’t too hard to understand. Your mutti must be very proud of you.
Thank you salma!! 😀
No problem 🙂
Wow year 6 wolves ! Well done Salma! keep up the good work! 🙂 its great!!!!!!!
Wow Salma! Looks like you really paid attention to your work! Keep up the good work! Just make sure you read over your work and work on your tenses for example : First person,Second person and third person…. Well done keep up the amazing work! Well done once again Salma! I ‘m really proud of you ! 🙂
Wow Salma well done ! You put in a lot of effort in your work! 🙂 ..
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I liked your big write Nathan but try to make the story a bit more tense like a soldier spotting Rose Blanche then shouting at her for feeding the Jews.;)
Keir I liked your writing however you never put a capital letters at the begin.
I really like yours Leonor I really like that you ended your work in a cliff hanger it left me in suspense. I really wanted to know what happens next !! ( It would be helpful if I didn’t know:) )
Well done everyone your work is amazing. I just love the tense,Maxxwell,Edward and Harry your stories put a image in my head well done everyone.
Also I really liked everyone’s work in Wolves because your story was really moving.Keep it up!!!!
Wow Emeka you made the story really tense! Next time read through your work because I noticed that some sentences didn’t make sense.;)
Good but there was a few mistakes in your witting.
Jonan and Maxxwell you guys are such creative writers.
I really like your narrative story. Your handwriting is also very neat. You also put a good image in my head! Keep up the good work!
Edward I like your style of writing and your presentation
Harry you had a nice piece of writing just remember to put a capital letter after your full stops.
Thank you for your advice Edward I will make sure that I use your advice in my next piece of writing.
Maxxwell and Edward are so creative with their describing words and always show good presentation.
Keir you have such brilliant piece of writing you have good use of ellipses, you just need to work on your speed you are rushing too much!!! Slow Down.
To Elsie you have very creative and it could be better if you work on your presentation and you spellings
Well done Harry try to remember your capital letters after full stops.
Maxwell you have amazing type of write and you have good use of conjunctions.
Youness I really like how you drew me into the big write especially the onomatopoeia.
Maxwell and Edward are very creative whith their words and always eager to do their work and are always making sure they put effort in their work
Youseff I like the you discribed the fear of rose
To Harry when I was read the piece of text a shiver came down my spine. Keep it up.
I really like your work Tia it very good but you need to work on making it more clearer with more (boys) words . It was a very good.
Toibat, I completely agree but your comment doesn’t set a good example for Tia if you don’t use proper grammar.
Nice start Emeka, I really like the way you showed everyone how Rose was feeling instead of telling them.
Salma, I really liked your work,there were some minor mistakes but I’m sure you are more than capable of looking over it and fixing them so your story is ready for everyone to read and enjoy.
Nathan used show not tell in your writing. You used very good description to make the me feel like I was there watching Rose Blanche help the Jews by taking her own food and giving it to them. 🙂
Nice choice of words Emeka. I really like the way you showed that Roses mum was angry instead of saying that she was angry. ‘Asher mum walked into the room she was startled by what she said.
Emeka, your writing was very tense and it put images in my head but I found some of it hard to read.
Youness you created a very tense piece of writing.You done this by at the very end of you story a soldier was following Rose and by doing this it really makes the reader think that will Rose get caught.
Younnes yours was very tense and exciting.
Well done.
J-Leigh your writing was very exciting. You made it quite tense throughout especially at the end when the Mayor was there. ‘Rose want to the gate to give them food. Suddenly the Mayor opened the door, Ruuun!’ 🙂
Emeka you were very creative with writing on how you used sarcasm in writing because people don’t usually do that and it is really good and now you have inspired me to try and use sarcasm in my own writing.
You made the story tense Abdul but be careful in what person your writing in.Because you kept on switching from third person to first person.
I think Younnes should be writer of the week because I read your writing and it made me feel like I was there.
Well done Jack you have a good piece of writing but next time try to stay next to the margin instead of floating off
Wow there so many comment who would you decide 🙂
Peggy I really like your work and I thought it was really affective.
The only thing you need to work on are your spellings.
Well done everyone I thought every single person in Wolves worked very very hard on their work.