Wow year 6 wolves. I really like your diary entries, the handwriting is great. I also noted how you used German words. I don’t understand German but I guess that “sehr hecker” means delicious. Well done year 6.
Wow year 6 wolves! I really enjoyed reading your diary entries! I particularly enjoyed reading Rose’s diary! I wonder what the boy must be thinking from his point of view! Maybe he could be a British spy or he can be Jewish… I can’t wait to see what you do next week for big write! Your presentation and hand writing is really neat! Keep up the good work!
I really enjoyed reading your diary entries in the voice of different characters from the story. You have all worked hard and are obviously interested in the tale. Some of you must think hard about how you develop fear in your writing. If I was picked up and thrown in the back of a van I would have been absolutely petrified and how to describe that fear is your challenge.
Jack, I really like your big write but try to check that it makes sense for example, you did “the soldiers when to war” instead of “the soldiers went to war.”
Nathan I really enjoyed your writing but you should explore new areas of your learning to make it exciting and suspenseful as soon as you start reading it so you want to carry on reading.
You made me want to read on Edward. Nice use of the ellipses.Next time try to use inverted commas for example “Stop flicking the pencils Thomas,” said Herr Bob.;)
Wow year 6 wolves. I really like your diary entries, the handwriting is great. I also noted how you used German words. I don’t understand German but I guess that “sehr hecker” means delicious. Well done year 6.
Nathan’s mum
Wow year 6 wolves! I really enjoyed reading your diary entries! I particularly enjoyed reading Rose’s diary! I wonder what the boy must be thinking from his point of view! Maybe he could be a British spy or he can be Jewish… I can’t wait to see what you do next week for big write! Your presentation and hand writing is really neat! Keep up the good work!
Good work everyone
I like Toibat’s one !!!
Wow I love your work Leonor !
Jack it was good
Kalo your handwriting was very neat but you could use more commas.
Maxwell, your handwriting is excellent but try your best to go over it next time to make sure it makes sense.;). Youssef.H
I like your imagination Leonor.
Good work Wolves. They were all interesting and well written diary entries.
I think that was amazing I loved it.
You recounted the story really well! It sounds just like the real thing.
They are all really good!! I loved the handwriting!!! AMAZING!!! 🙂
I liked your powerful verbs like “inhaling” Tia
They are all really good!!! I loved the handwriting!!!! AMAZING!!!!! 🙂
I really liked Maxel’s big write because he used repetition for effect
Edward you’re a very creative write,I love your powerful verbs,it really brought your writing to life.
Maxwell I liked your poppy poem.
GO YEAR 6 WOLVES!!!
Wow your work is amazing I can’t wait to read some more
You all did brilliantly they sound really realistic!!
Awesome big writes :p
I really liked your hand writing and your presentation
Rico well done
I really liked your big write Elsie
I enjoyed rico’s big write 😉
I loved your second paragraph do well in the future
I really enjoyed reading your diary entries in the voice of different characters from the story. You have all worked hard and are obviously interested in the tale. Some of you must think hard about how you develop fear in your writing. If I was picked up and thrown in the back of a van I would have been absolutely petrified and how to describe that fear is your challenge.
Rico I loved your powerful adjectives
I really liked your handwriting and presentation.I think you are the writer of the weeeeeeeeek!
Great year 6 loved them Elsie,Sophia great detail great practice makes Progress.
Nathan I really liked the way that you have two different diary and made me feel like I was Rose or The Mayor
I really liked everyone’s big write beacause you wrote in tense words to draw the reader in.
I really like Jonan’s big write because of the tense and exiting details you put into it!
Jack, I really like your big write but try to check that it makes sense for example, you did “the soldiers when to war” instead of “the soldiers went to war.”
Elsie I really like your writing especially when you said” I felt like I wanted a to go back to sleep” because it put a very good image in my head!
Nathan I really enjoyed your writing but you should explore new areas of your learning to make it exciting and suspenseful as soon as you start reading it so you want to carry on reading.
You made me want to read on Edward. Nice use of the ellipses.Next time try to use inverted commas for example “Stop flicking the pencils Thomas,” said Herr Bob.;)
Well done Wolves class!!!All your story was amazing.Sometimes the tension calm,but some moments had a lot of pressure.
Maxwell make sure that it makes sense
Nathan’s first paragraph wasn’t so interesting because it only tells you about what Rose Blanche had for breakfast.
Abdul, when you wrote about Thomas getting told off. You changed off to of.
Youssef I think your writing is amazing,but I think you should use more full stop instead of commas
Riyad, your second paragraph was exciting to read on but you didn’t extend it to finish it off.
On your first paragraph Riyad you put “Dear Dairy” instead of “Dear Diary” and also in your first paragraph those arrow you put,it really confused me.
You didn’t add enough commas Harry, but you wrote a fantastic presentation.
Nice work Rico.I like your Biography, although you could make your writing a little more visible.
Good work Riyad. I liked your use of punctuations.
Great work Leonor ,but your spelling could use a little work.
Using the time was very effective Oliver! But I noticed that you changed the tense of your writing so read through your work.
I liked the emotional writing Jonan! But you need to check through your work for change of tense.