Well done Harry! Your story was really exciting. One thing To improve is that whenever you write w you always put a capital instead of a lower case. Besides that it was really good !!!!!!!! 😀 😀
It’s me, Youssef’s mum.
It was a great fun to read your imaginative story about World War II.
I particularly liked your description about the argument scene, the boy character was quite rude though.
Well done, go on your big writing more !
Brilliant story, Younnes! I liked the whole plot of how this troublesome boy Dan got through the World War II in a special tunnel ( reminding me of Anthony Browne’s Tunnel, you know) and finally got more mature attitude for his school life.
Well structured story! Go on son ! Mum.
You are a very talented writer. I really enjoyed reading your story and could imagine a teacher like Mr French oops Mr Foul!
A little tip. Please be careful when you write and do not slip between first and third person.
Olivia’s story was so well written! I hope she is planning to write the next installment, after that cliff-hanger… I want to know what happens next, and what time she’s been transported to.
I really like Emeka’s description of how the time-slipped school is different from the modern school he’s transported from. And I like his character, Mr Foul (who could that be?)
To Edward – You are so talented. I really enjoyed reading your time slip story.
I enjoyed every story.
I enjoyed every story and they were amazing!
Thx Yedidja .
This is Edward’s mum I like your writing Edward well done. 😀
This is Elsie’s mum, I really enjoyed your story Elsie!!!!!:D 😀 😀 😀 By the way everybody’s story was fantastic!!!:D
Thanks for your comments Elsie & Edward’s mum! I’ll give Edward & Elsie a treat tomorrow. I’m sure they’ll be sharing it with you!
Excellent recount Keir!
Keir’s Mum
Thanks Keir’s mum! I’ll give a treat to Keir tomorrow – I am sure he’ll share it with you!
Well done Harry! Your story was really exciting. One thing To improve is that whenever you write w you always put a capital instead of a lower case. Besides that it was really good !!!!!!!! 😀 😀
Well done Michaela, yours was amazing!!! I could picture your story in my head! 😀 😀
That was actually me Oliver who sent the message above not Harry! That was a school boy error by me sorry !!!!!!!!!!!!
Harry you have really neat handwriting!!
Well done Harry! I really enjoyed your story. It left me on the edge of my seat. I hope to see the rest of it after Big Write on Friday.
Well done! Even though I (sadly) was not there to do the big write. 😀
It’s me, Youssef’s mum.
It was a great fun to read your imaginative story about World War II.
I particularly liked your description about the argument scene, the boy character was quite rude though.
Well done, go on your big writing more !
Thanks for your comments mum. I will be passing a treat to both the boys tomorrow. I am sure they will want to share it with you!
Thank you.
Yay!
Brilliant story, Younnes! I liked the whole plot of how this troublesome boy Dan got through the World War II in a special tunnel ( reminding me of Anthony Browne’s Tunnel, you know) and finally got more mature attitude for his school life.
Well structured story! Go on son ! Mum.
Thanks mum!
Peggy
I wonder if your character will like being evacuated? I liked your description of their feelings.
Emeka
You are a very talented writer. I really enjoyed reading your story and could imagine a teacher like Mr French oops Mr Foul!
A little tip. Please be careful when you write and do not slip between first and third person.
Brilliant writing Elsie, Michaela, Harry, Maxxwell and Toibat your writing was outstanding. 😀 : D
Harry I enjoyed reading your big writing, your handwriting was fantastic!
Your story was brilliant Harry!
Keep it up everyone!
Your story was very interesting j-Leigh,try not to make many spelling mistakes.
I like the way you wrote noooo at the end of your work Edward and Keir.
You show excellent progress in your work Younnes!
I enjoyed reading your work Harry!
Nice Job!!
Emeka and I have the same teacher’s name. What a coincidence!
My mum just looked at your writing Emeka and she likes it.
Thank you Younnes or Youssef.
I like yours too.
All of your work is excellent! 😉
Olivia’s story was so well written! I hope she is planning to write the next installment, after that cliff-hanger… I want to know what happens next, and what time she’s been transported to.
I’ve read Harry’s story too. Your writing is really neat. Your story needs to carry on too, about what happens next.
I really like Emeka’s description of how the time-slipped school is different from the modern school he’s transported from. And I like his character, Mr Foul (who could that be?)