Well done feranmi! You have done really well. I like the way you really made it look like a news paper report. I think you have made a few mistakes, read over your writing and make it better really good.
Again some great pieces of writing. Well done year 6 – looks like you are all putting in amazing effort.
Well done Chelsey-Leigh. I can see you are really enjoying learning about Macbeth and have a great understanding. Again though always check back over your writing. Also try not to rush your work as you can see the difference in the handwriting from beginning to end. xx
Well done Denver. It is clear that you have put a lot of thought into your writing. In my opinion, you could have made your writing clear. How do you suggest you could improve your writing?
Mayomi you have used a great use of semi colons .Have you read back your work to yourself ? You have missed out a few full stops so maybe you could read it back to yourself and fill in the full stops.
Mayomi I loved the use of semi colons also the joke at the bottom of the page, you can’t actually say you think Macbeth done it because you can get fired or Macbeth can kill you.
Amazing writing Rumman! I really love the way you made the reader feel like they were reading a real newspaper! Did you use a real newspaper to give you an ideaa of how to write in that particular style of a newspaper? To improve, you could
look over your work to correct the spelling mistakes.
Elizabeth You made a good newspaper. You choosed the guards, how comes you didn’t do Macbeth? Elizabeth you put ‘ Mac-muster ‘ at the top when you wasn’t blaming him. You should of wrote something about the guards.
Brilliant writing Sayed. You have put in a lot of effort into it. You have described what has happened very well and shown lots of emotion. In my opinion, you should go over that piece of writing and check it because I saw a random letter just there. What do you think?
Elizabeth your work is really interesting.You have put loads of information in it.Do you know how to use semi colons other than the cheats way? Next time you could put a caption under the picture.
Denver you have put good quotes and have a greate newspaper. I could see you tried to not show bieos to the Norwigens, why did you pick the Norwigens? Denver you need to space out your word because it looks like random words.
Chelsey,I like the way you put a time adverbial, your writing reminds me of when Macbeth stabbed Duncan did you get some of your ideals from there? Next time you can join up.
Tia outstanding piece of work I can linked this when we did a newspaper in year 4 but the thing that we can get better at is making your work a bit clearer.
Well done Mayomi! Outstanding writing, it really drew me in. It was very suspicious and interesting . Better if you spaced out your writing a bit more. Really good Mayomi.
Rumman I liked how you drew the reader in. It looks like you love writing newspaper. The thing that you can improve on is the handwriting make it a bit bigger
Well done Bobby I really like the way that you described how king Duncan! The only thing I would say you could improve on is to not like go straight into it and make your handwriting a bit clearer next time.
Excellent work Denver you really showed how the body was just there and how they didn’t know who did it and how you were debating about who did it. The lo one thing that I would say for you to improve on is to not start of early one morning next time.
Well don Tyrese!great piece of writing I really like the way that you explained how it would be a doom for Scotland without king Ducan.ther is actually nothing that I could say that you need to improve on. I mean it!
Amazing work Chelsey! I really liked the way you said how the rumours about king Duncan’s death,and the way you wrote how old he was.I also like the way that you explained what was happening in the newspaper. Keep the good work up!
Feranmi I like how you have included all the key points. Did you have a plan that you could look at ? There are some sentences that don’t make sense. To improve your writing you could read over your work.
Feranmi you made a fine newspaper. You was blaming a lot of people, who was you showing bioes to. Feranmi some sentences didn’t make sence, you need to read it over to make sure it will make sence.
Tia I like the way you put a question at the end it reminds me when Duncan died did you get some of your ideas from there? Next time you can make some of your writing more clear.
I love your newspaper Mayomi, I really like the way that you cast suspicion on the guards but also hinted that it could be Macbeth, also great use of semi-colons. It reminds me of the Macbeth play that came to our school, did you use some ideas from there? To improve, you could use more writing techniques to make it even better.
Ruby I love your writing it reminds me of the story of Macbeth but when Duncan dies did you get some of your ideas next time don’t go over some of your words it makes it hard to read.
Sayed I your newspaper because your saying that someone mysterious killed Duncan and I like it . How do you put the emotion in your writing.Next time you should write more about Duncan’s deaf because I like reading .what you need to improve is that you have to do your capital letters in.
Well done year 6! All of your work was amazing ! I particularly enjoyed Madiha’s article as you added a lot of information in your work ! Well done everyone!
I really like your newspaper report Madiha . You can see who you are trying to make look guilty and whose side your on . Maybe next time you should do more because the one page you done was good .
Well done Sayed. You have clearly put a lot of effort into your writing. You have described what has happened very well. You have also used show not to tell. Do you agree with my opinion?
Well done Denver your writing was impressive it put images in my head of the expression of the characters but when you said the elite guards you could of added something like the elite guards who towerd over macbeth
Excellent. Well done again Tyrese you make me proud always.
I like your newspaper.
It is lovely!
Amazing work Madiha. Keep it up.
Fantastic work Tia
Well done feranmi! You have done really well. I like the way you really made it look like a news paper report. I think you have made a few mistakes, read over your writing and make it better really good.
Again some great pieces of writing. Well done year 6 – looks like you are all putting in amazing effort.
Well done Chelsey-Leigh. I can see you are really enjoying learning about Macbeth and have a great understanding. Again though always check back over your writing. Also try not to rush your work as you can see the difference in the handwriting from beginning to end. xx
Bobby I like how you made a greate newspaper. You blamed the Norwigens, why? Bobby I think you could of made a longer story to make it better.
Well done Denver. It is clear that you have put a lot of thought into your writing. In my opinion, you could have made your writing clear. How do you suggest you could improve your writing?
Mayomi you have used a great use of semi colons .Have you read back your work to yourself ? You have missed out a few full stops so maybe you could read it back to yourself and fill in the full stops.
Mayomi I loved the use of semi colons also the joke at the bottom of the page, you can’t actually say you think Macbeth done it because you can get fired or Macbeth can kill you.
Amazing writing Rumman! I really love the way you made the reader feel like they were reading a real newspaper! Did you use a real newspaper to give you an ideaa of how to write in that particular style of a newspaper? To improve, you could
look over your work to correct the spelling mistakes.
Mayomi you writing is very good
Elizabeth You made a good newspaper. You choosed the guards, how comes you didn’t do Macbeth? Elizabeth you put ‘ Mac-muster ‘ at the top when you wasn’t blaming him. You should of wrote something about the guards.
Brilliant writing Sayed. You have put in a lot of effort into it. You have described what has happened very well and shown lots of emotion. In my opinion, you should go over that piece of writing and check it because I saw a random letter just there. What do you think?
Elizabeth your work is really interesting.You have put loads of information in it.Do you know how to use semi colons other than the cheats way? Next time you could put a caption under the picture.
Denver you have put good quotes and have a greate newspaper. I could see you tried to not show bieos to the Norwigens, why did you pick the Norwigens? Denver you need to space out your word because it looks like random words.
Chelsey,I like the way you put a time adverbial, your writing reminds me of when Macbeth stabbed Duncan did you get some of your ideals from there? Next time you can join up.
Bobby I really like how your punctuation is improving but next time please can you write more clear.
Tia outstanding piece of work I can linked this when we did a newspaper in year 4 but the thing that we can get better at is making your work a bit clearer.
Well done Sayed your writing is very good. You used excellent vocabulary. It really sounded like a newspaper, do you read the newspaper a lot?
Well done Mayomi! Outstanding writing, it really drew me in. It was very suspicious and interesting . Better if you spaced out your writing a bit more. Really good Mayomi.
Rumman I liked how you drew the reader in. It looks like you love writing newspaper. The thing that you can improve on is the handwriting make it a bit bigger
Well done Denver you have really impressed me. Your newspaper had outstanding wow words. Better if you spaced out the words more.
Wow wee! Sayed amazing work I liked the way you used such good words I like how you hint instead of just saying.
Excellent vocabulary.
Well done Madiha! Great piece of writing. I really enjoyed reading it . Make your writing bolder to make it clear . But very good .
Thank you Feranmi,next time I will try and make my writing bolder . I liked your piece of writing too.
Well done Bobby I really like the way that you described how king Duncan! The only thing I would say you could improve on is to not like go straight into it and make your handwriting a bit clearer next time.
Excellent work Denver you really showed how the body was just there and how they didn’t know who did it and how you were debating about who did it. The lo one thing that I would say for you to improve on is to not start of early one morning next time.
Well don Tyrese!great piece of writing I really like the way that you explained how it would be a doom for Scotland without king Ducan.ther is actually nothing that I could say that you need to improve on. I mean it!
Amazing work Chelsey! I really liked the way you said how the rumours about king Duncan’s death,and the way you wrote how old he was.I also like the way that you explained what was happening in the newspaper. Keep the good work up!
Feranmi I like how you have included all the key points. Did you have a plan that you could look at ? There are some sentences that don’t make sense. To improve your writing you could read over your work.
Feranmi you made a fine newspaper. You was blaming a lot of people, who was you showing bioes to. Feranmi some sentences didn’t make sence, you need to read it over to make sure it will make sence.
Tia I like the way you put a question at the end it reminds me when Duncan died did you get some of your ideas from there? Next time you can make some of your writing more clear.
I love your newspaper Mayomi, I really like the way that you cast suspicion on the guards but also hinted that it could be Macbeth, also great use of semi-colons. It reminds me of the Macbeth play that came to our school, did you use some ideas from there? To improve, you could use more writing techniques to make it even better.
Ruby I love your writing it reminds me of the story of Macbeth but when Duncan dies did you get some of your ideas next time don’t go over some of your words it makes it hard to read.
Sayed I your newspaper because your saying that someone mysterious killed Duncan and I like it . How do you put the emotion in your writing.Next time you should write more about Duncan’s deaf because I like reading .what you need to improve is that you have to do your capital letters in.
Well done year 6! All of your work was amazing ! I particularly enjoyed Madiha’s article as you added a lot of information in your work ! Well done everyone!
I really like your newspaper report Madiha . You can see who you are trying to make look guilty and whose side your on . Maybe next time you should do more because the one page you done was good .
Well done Sayed. You have clearly put a lot of effort into your writing. You have described what has happened very well. You have also used show not to tell. Do you agree with my opinion?
Well done Denver your writing was impressive it put images in my head of the expression of the characters but when you said the elite guards you could of added something like the elite guards who towerd over macbeth