I really liked the diary entry’s.Maybe you should write the next few diary’s with your suprerior writing skills. The writing was so impressive that it made me have an idea of what happened in my brain. Maybe you could just make it have a bit more sense and improvement.
That was the best diary I have ever read especially about lady Macbeth. But the only that you should improve is to make things make more sense and a bit more wow words.
Dillon I thought your letter was well thought out if a bit rushed your writing ws a little hard to read but gave a good account of what was happening
Forsoothe twas a good read lad
Nanna xx
I really like your piece of writing. I really like how you showed how much lady macbeth really miss her husband. You have used a lot of detail . Better if you spaced out your writing to make it more clear to read. really good xx
Well done Matthew you used detail very well in you writing. It was very clever when you wrote November 1876 it really linked back to the past. Have you read a book set in the past lately? Maybe next time to improve you could make your handwriting a bit bigger.
Well done Feranmi a very good piece of writing, you used semi colons very well. It was very good as a diary entry, have you read one lately? One way you could improve is by finishing your writing.
Ramman your writing is amazing,it reminds me of a film called Macbeth did you get some of your idaers from there . Next time you can make a plan because you have done a lot of crossing out.
Nadine I really like how you have used expanded noun phrases. Do you know how to use a semi colon? Next time you could write a bit more. Overall it is really impressive!
Thank you Madiha, you are right. I need to write a bit more and include at least one semi colon. I will try to use your comment to help me with my next big write.
Kane I like how you made an interesting story. My favourite part is when Lady Macbeth thinks of putting poison in the tea for the gardues, where did you get that idea from? Kane I think you stared to write as Macbeth , as it was his diary entry, in the second paragraph which made it confusing.
Your piece of writing is very good Sayed .In your second diary entry I got confused because you said lady Duncan. Who is lady Duncan in your story? If lady Duncan does not exist in your story I suggest you make your writing clear. Do you agree?
Matthew your writing is really drawing the reader in. It reminds me of the play. Could you write a bit bigger? Next time you should spell father right. You spell it like farther with an R.
Great writing Rumman! I love the way you said “my husband is coming home safe to me.” Your letter reminds me of the play that came to our school, it would be even better if you changed the word brutal because you used it twice in a row near to the beginning of the letter.
Kane your writing is good it reminds me of the Macbeth play,did you get some of your idaers from them ? some of the words you used were small,next time you can make your words bigger.
What passionate letters. Macbeth is one of my favourite plays. The way many of you have captured her love and ambition for her husband is very good.
Keep up the good work
Ms Keen
Good work Tia, just like Shakespeare you have portrayed Lady Macbeth to be a nasty piece of work. Be careful with your spellings and remember to plan out your work first before you begin to write. A very imaginative diary entry, well done.
Well done Matthew, a very imaginative piece of writing. What was your inspiration to describe the witches? To improve, I think you should make your handwriting bigger and use expanded noun phrases like we practised in class.
Well done Jacorey your hand writing is great in your next diary entry could you use more show not tell? To improve you could practice using show and tell in small sentences.
Well done Sayed – I liked your rhetorical question in the third paragraph and you also used an emotion to put an image into the reader’s mind. Which reader inspired you to write this?
I really like your use of adjectives Denver. Where did you get them from?! They are excellent. To improve, I think you should make your handwriting clearer as it looks rushed.
Well done Shem I liked the way you used show not tell very good.If you could would you use more expanded noun phrases? To improve I think that you should make your hand writing more presentable,and so people can read it as well.Because I found it very hard to read.
Sayed I like the part when you put the expanded noun phrase and it describes Lady Macbeth when she what’s to ware the red dress and the green dress . If you can can you put more expanded noun phrase? Next if think you have to improve on your semi-colons and put it on yor work but I see
but I steel like it
Well done Kane ,I really like the way that you explained that you were happy that king is Ducan was coming to your castle!
I also like the way that you described what it would be on earth without Ducan.I wonder were you got that phrase from?
Sayed I really liked the way that you started of about how much you loved her and how much you missed her. You really let the feelings out about how you felt without her that you couldn’t bare another day without her.The only thing I would say you need to work on is your handwriting as I found it a bit hard to read.Well done
Well done William I really liked the way that you described that it was not a normal day that Macbeth was still alive.You really showed that in your writing you just need to improve on your handwriting.
Well done shem I’m very impressed. I especially like your opening sentence about Lady Macbeth’s feelings for her husband and the way you have maintained the old English language. Just keep an eye on improving your handwriting. Keep up the good work.
I really enjoyed reading my writing. I have used semi colons and remembered to use paragraphs. What I think I can improve on is forming the letter S properly because it looks like a D.
Well done everyone! Feranmi your work is awesome, I like the use of some;others and you really got into the character , I felt as if I was actually reading the secret diary of Lady Macbeth!
Matthew I like the emotional language that you use because it describes that you love lady Macbeth. Have you put semicolons ? You need to improve on your expanded noun phrases .
I really like your diary entry Nadine . You really made it seem like he diary , you made her seem exited about the visit and the cooking . Maybe next time you should write more about the wiches .
I really liked the diary entry’s.Maybe you should write the next few diary’s with your suprerior writing skills. The writing was so impressive that it made me have an idea of what happened in my brain. Maybe you could just make it have a bit more sense and improvement.
That was good sayed well done. Maybe you should work on handwriting as I found it a bit difficult to read.
That was the best diary I have ever read especially about lady Macbeth. But the only that you should improve is to make things make more sense and a bit more wow words.
We’ll done son, very nice. I really liked it. I think you should explore ideas further to make it more better.
Dillon I thought your letter was well thought out if a bit rushed your writing ws a little hard to read but gave a good account of what was happening
Forsoothe twas a good read lad
Nanna xx
Elizabeth I really like how you added wow words. I wish I was in year 5
I really like your piece of writing. I really like how you showed how much lady macbeth really miss her husband. You have used a lot of detail . Better if you spaced out your writing to make it more clear to read. really good xx
Your writing has improved.
Well done your writing is amazing.
Anya your writing is wow.
Your hand writing has impoved Anya.
Great work xx
Anya your writing is so good
Anya keep it up!
Well done Matthew you used detail very well in you writing. It was very clever when you wrote November 1876 it really linked back to the past. Have you read a book set in the past lately? Maybe next time to improve you could make your handwriting a bit bigger.
Well done Feranmi a very good piece of writing, you used semi colons very well. It was very good as a diary entry, have you read one lately? One way you could improve is by finishing your writing.
Well done matthew you have put a wonderfully image in my head keep it up.
Well done Matthew and Che very good hand writing
Well done Matthew
Well done
Well done only if you could make your writing a little bit bigger
I love the way you gave used in 1876 it really bring the reader back
Brillent diary!
your writing is very describtive.
Anya I love your writing.
Ramman your writing is amazing,it reminds me of a film called Macbeth did you get some of your idaers from there . Next time you can make a plan because you have done a lot of crossing out.
Nadine I really like how you have used expanded noun phrases. Do you know how to use a semi colon? Next time you could write a bit more. Overall it is really impressive!
Thank you Madiha, you are right. I need to write a bit more and include at least one semi colon. I will try to use your comment to help me with my next big write.
Kane I like how you made an interesting story. My favourite part is when Lady Macbeth thinks of putting poison in the tea for the gardues, where did you get that idea from? Kane I think you stared to write as Macbeth , as it was his diary entry, in the second paragraph which made it confusing.
Your piece of writing is very good Sayed .In your second diary entry I got confused because you said lady Duncan. Who is lady Duncan in your story? If lady Duncan does not exist in your story I suggest you make your writing clear. Do you agree?
Matthew your writing is really drawing the reader in. It reminds me of the play. Could you write a bit bigger? Next time you should spell father right. You spell it like farther with an R.
Great writing Rumman! I love the way you said “my husband is coming home safe to me.” Your letter reminds me of the play that came to our school, it would be even better if you changed the word brutal because you used it twice in a row near to the beginning of the letter.
Kane your writing is good it reminds me of the Macbeth play,did you get some of your idaers from them ? some of the words you used were small,next time you can make your words bigger.
I really like your piece of writing anye
Your Piece of writing is good
Dear Year 6
What passionate letters. Macbeth is one of my favourite plays. The way many of you have captured her love and ambition for her husband is very good.
Keep up the good work
Ms Keen
Good work Tia, just like Shakespeare you have portrayed Lady Macbeth to be a nasty piece of work. Be careful with your spellings and remember to plan out your work first before you begin to write. A very imaginative diary entry, well done.
Well done Matthew, a very imaginative piece of writing. What was your inspiration to describe the witches? To improve, I think you should make your handwriting bigger and use expanded noun phrases like we practised in class.
Well done Jacorey your hand writing is great in your next diary entry could you use more show not tell? To improve you could practice using show and tell in small sentences.
Well done Sayed – I liked your rhetorical question in the third paragraph and you also used an emotion to put an image into the reader’s mind. Which reader inspired you to write this?
I really like your use of adjectives Denver. Where did you get them from?! They are excellent. To improve, I think you should make your handwriting clearer as it looks rushed.
Well done Shem I liked the way you used show not tell very good.If you could would you use more expanded noun phrases? To improve I think that you should make your hand writing more presentable,and so people can read it as well.Because I found it very hard to read.
Anya I really like your description , you could improve your spelling and in the end what dress did you were?
Well done Tia!! You used a lot of description in your writing. You made a mistake about your semi colon in the second paragraph.
Sayed I like the part when you put the expanded noun phrase and it describes Lady Macbeth when she what’s to ware the red dress and the green dress . If you can can you put more expanded noun phrase? Next if think you have to improve on your semi-colons and put it on yor work but I see
but I steel like it
Well done Tyrese on another excellent piece of work I’m very proud of you keep it up.
Well done Anya your writing is amazing. You have got alot of good idears and your words are brillant as well!
I really liked reading your diary Iam very proud of you because you used a good range of word .
A very character revealing diary and detail report of current account of events.
I love it Anya!
I really liked reading your diary I am very proud of you because you Good. Sayed
I really liked reading your diary I am very proud of you because you Good I love The Sayed .
I really like your writing anya .
wow your writing is amazing KEEP IT UP!
Anya I really like your hand writing and your writing, I like the way you used expanded noun phrases.
Anya ,those pizza look lovley just like your writing!!!!!
Your hand writing has to improve but your writing was so romanic .
you have used goood and powerfull words so I am proud of you Anya.
Well done Kane ,I really like the way that you explained that you were happy that king is Ducan was coming to your castle!
I also like the way that you described what it would be on earth without Ducan.I wonder were you got that phrase from?
Kane I like the words you using the words are giving me a picture in my head.
Sayed I really liked the way that you started of about how much you loved her and how much you missed her. You really let the feelings out about how you felt without her that you couldn’t bare another day without her.The only thing I would say you need to work on is your handwriting as I found it a bit hard to read.Well done
Well done William I really liked the way that you described that it was not a normal day that Macbeth was still alive.You really showed that in your writing you just need to improve on your handwriting.
Well done shem I’m very impressed. I especially like your opening sentence about Lady Macbeth’s feelings for her husband and the way you have maintained the old English language. Just keep an eye on improving your handwriting. Keep up the good work.
Is very intriguing piece of work with a wide range of language
You have got into the character of Lady Macbeth
Very well done Shem
I really enjoyed reading my writing. I have used semi colons and remembered to use paragraphs. What I think I can improve on is forming the letter S properly because it looks like a D.
Well done everyone! Feranmi your work is awesome, I like the use of some;others and you really got into the character , I felt as if I was actually reading the secret diary of Lady Macbeth!
Matthew I like the emotional language that you use because it describes that you love lady Macbeth. Have you put semicolons ? You need to improve on your expanded noun phrases .
I really like your diary entry Nadine . You really made it seem like he diary , you made her seem exited about the visit and the cooking . Maybe next time you should write more about the wiches .